Please read my essay? It's for middle school, its not a boring one?

What can I add to it? It has to be a page long, double spaced.

The Most Wonderful Time of the Year

I felt the cold rush of air as I opened the front door. I could feel the freezing wind burning on my cheeks, but I didn鈥檛 care. The snow on the ground looked like a big, fuzzy blanket. I was so happy and cheerful.
As I hurried to help shovel snow, with cocoa in hand, I heard the crunching of snow beneath my feet. The streets were deserted, other than friendly neighbors shoveling bottomless blankets of snow. The lights looked beautiful on all the houses. We were all happy, the dog too, wagging his tail in his thick coat of fur. It smelled like sweet peppermint, rich, warm hot cocoas, and chocolaty pudding. I took a sip of the rich cocoa. As a misty snow crept by, my whole family smiled. This is what my house is like in December.
In December, my house is very busy and exciting. I love the deep blankets of snow, sipping hot cocoa, and munching on sweet candy canes. It is so much fun

, and my house is filled with holiday cheer! I can't wait for December!

i would say "i thought of coco and exc.' and you smelled chimney smoke and the image of christmas appeard in your mind and make details about that!

other than that it is excellent !!

xoxoxo
~sammy

hope i helped :]

i like it. it is really good.

I like it ,sounds good.Wouldn't change anything.

it seems fine, very good, many details =). maybe a few more details about how u love this time of year, maybe something about the smell of food, or something about the smell of burning wood in the fireplace (if u have one), and it will be great. good luck =)

Just needs a bit more detail........rather than cut off go into it a bit more.

great essay. I like how you used similes to compare things to one another and the detail you used. A+!

i like it good job with the details!!