What Do You Think of My Short Story? *based on my dream*?

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Written By: Alexis R
鈥淲ake up,鈥?I could hear a soft voice calling to me, but I couldn鈥檛 find it. All I could see was darkness. It called again. 鈥淲ake up.鈥?I could hear piercing shrieks, from a horse. I opened my eyes, my body ached. What happened? The piercing shriek filled the air again. My Pegasus! I shot up, and saw my sister, Diva, trying to get a steady hold on him.
鈥淕et away from him!鈥?I started running towards her. She turned and a sly smile ran across her face. She flashed away; I still kept running for my beautiful Pegasus. As I approached, she flashed back and ran her sword through my Pegasus鈥檚 chest.
鈥淣o!鈥?I screamed. My blood boiled as I saw her take her sword out of my Pegasus.
鈥淵ou know Saya, your Pegasus has the most divine blood,鈥?Diva said, as she licked the blood from her sword.
鈥淵ou鈥檙e cruel! He鈥檇 done nothing to you, and you try to kill him!鈥?br> 鈥淲ell it was the only sure way to let you actually be set free. Now fight me, with all your power!鈥?I pulled out my sword from its sheath, as she did to. We circled each other, and then I lunged at her. My sword was pointed strait to her stomach. Diva blocked the attack with her own sword.
鈥淒o you really think that you can kill me with that thing that you call a sword? Saya darling, you鈥檙e just like me.鈥?I ran at her sword pointed again at her stomach.
鈥淚 will never be like you!鈥?She and I were head to head as our swords met, but she hadn鈥檛 counted on a counter attack. I let my sword slide to her side, and I cut her. Diva held her wound.
鈥淪aya, you impeccable wench!鈥?The cut was deep, but she got away. At that time, I didn鈥檛 care if she did. All of my attention was focused on Haji, my beautiful Pegasus.
鈥淧lease don鈥檛 go. I can鈥檛 live without you!鈥?br> 鈥淚 will try, but my wound is much too deep.鈥?He said with no fighting left in his voice. 鈥淚 can only fight for so long.鈥?br> 鈥淭hen I will stay with you, and we shall fight together.鈥?I held his hand to my chest, and tears filled my eyes. I silently cried.
鈥淧lease do not shed tears for me. I my life started when I met you, and now I have lived it to the fullest. I love you.鈥?
鈥淣o! Please don鈥檛 go!鈥?My tears were falling onto his cheek. And then something happened. As my tears fell, his wounded body lifted into the air. A white mist covered the ground, and I could not see. My eyes fell upon a dark shadow coming towards me.
鈥淪aya,鈥?br> 鈥淗aji, is that you?鈥?It drew nearer, and the figure was human. It couldn鈥檛 be him. We were now face to face, and he had wonderful blue eyes, just like Haji. He put his hand on my cheek, and came towards my face. His pink lips kissed mine, and with it I knew it was him, my beloved Haji!

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